Zdzislaw Beksinski. One of the best converting the images he feels into a canvas.

>>2266
I agree. I really like his photography, too. (Spoiled for 3D vaguely/off-topic)

>>2264
I just found out that Giger died 3 days ago.
Damn.

>>2266
i really want to someday make a game or film (or at least something very immersive) stylistically identical to the landscapes that Zdzisław Beksiński made. a decaying, horrific place to visit.

>>2312

It is my first one, so some of the songs are going to suck. That is a fact of life. But I'm looking into better audio programs, and I've learned from most of my mistakes, so I'm going to give it a go again.

>>2310
It could be very interesting if it was just a little more melodic. Going straight for glitch is a bit ambitious for a beginner.

Also what's up with your bandcamp page?

>>2333

Yeah, I definitely did some things wrong. I believe that I should follow another genre more closely, instead of trying to form my own. But at least I get points for originality.

The black guy is the person from "Don't Copy That Floppy". I thought that it would be funny to put him on my page, but I think that I should probably do a redesign.

>>2339
Well, I'll be interested to see you develop.

I don't know. I do think one should challenge oneself in some way in order to produce something that causes one's satisfaction.

Not a half bad little dress up game. Could do with a bit more hair and cloths options.

Better than expected.

I am pretty adorable as an anime gal.

>>2222
I'm horrendous at pronunciation of Japanese, so I kind of had to make those instrumental.

>>2220
>>2221
>>2222
t-thanks

Nice voice, the expression was just right

I've just uploaded a bunch of stuff that I've had in a backlog of sorts. I think the best are Anytime, Teenage Dream, and the instrumental No More Mr. Nice Guy.

>>2234
Somewhat embarrassingly, I was sure Teenage Dream was going to be the Katy Perry song, which I thought was going to contrast awesomely with Waiting 'Round to Die. I most enjoyed the Memphis Blues cover, but there are some serious plosive issues with the recording.

I liked it. I had no idea what was going on most of the time, but that seemed intentional and it had a good, weird atmosphere. Playing it through at 4:30 AM was probably the ideal time.

>>2229

Thank you. I think that the music was key to giving it that atmosphere. It is from Killer7.

you know what, just never mind.
i don't need moderators getting their kicks by fucking with me when i'm trying to post here.
just fuck this website, i'm never coming back.
its a shit boring site anyway.

You made two nearly identical threads so I deleted the first one, how is that fucking with you?

I wanted to do this when I first saw the scene and then figured there'd be thousands of other people with the same idea.

>>2210
Slower.

http://tohno-chan.com/ot/res/18197.html

Okay, a few suggestions to make that `website' better.

1.- Center the whole thing. If it's in top left it looks stupid.

2.- Make the icons and stuff bigger (only do this after you have centered the stuff).

3.- If I hover over the icons, I want to know what it is. Some icons make it obvious, but others clearly don't. So make it like xkcd does with the comics, just that instead of another witty continuation of the comic, just make the title appear (`blog', `donations'....)

4.- I have seen a few `memes' in that website, IIRC. Please no.

hi tokiko!

this is mine i am very proud of it as well:
http://www.skiphopz.com

my uncle, Vin Diesel, helped me put it together

>>2167
>Google Chrome is having trouble accessing the network.
>This may be because your firewall or antivirus software wrongly thinks Google Chrome is an intruder on your computer and is blocking it from connecting to the Internet.

I-Is it gone?

>>2184
Right you are! This record just needed to happen though, I have the rest of my life to try to become Freddy Mercury.

>>2185
I think you're right about the lack of diversity, for I tried to make this a concise and cohesive album, and just hoped it wouldn't be too tedious of a listen on account of it's brevity.
Thank you though, I find it interesting that you mention glam rock and new wave, as I'd count neither of those as influences in the least. Never recorded any covers, and all the cover songs I rock out to by myself are wildly inappropriate for my voice anyway.

>>2186
Sure. You can stream from the bandcamp page, though.

I'm the guy that said the thing about Tom Waits, The Pop Group, and Foetus.
At this point, though, it's really, REALLY reminding me of Swans, specifically White Light from the Mouth of Infinity and maybe a gentler Filth. Somewhat less feeling like The Jesus Lizard, but it's still there just a little.
I'm honestly liking it more the more that I listen to it. >>2184 said that your voice needs a lot of work but really I like the vocals the way they are; they're characteristic.
I think this album would have been seen as ahead of its time, but would have fit in very well in any mid-90's post-punk collection. It was made at just the right time, to be honest. I'll have to let it sink in a little more, but the way I'm getting it so far I really like it.

As far as the whole covers thing, I think you might do well with a few Jesus and Mary Chain tracks, and, just for the hell of it, some Pere Ubu.

Also, should the title be "Terra Somma: Then the Ceiling Became the Sky"? What's the significance of the subtitle, shown on the art but not on the bandcamp page itself?

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>>2187
I heard that track when you posted it before, and I thought it was good. I couldn't figure out whether the vocal delivery was intentional or not, though. If intentional, it's not a bad idea but it needs to be honed more so it isn't quite as all-over-the-place; if not, well, work on your voice but still use that variable, warbling style of singing. I agree with others that the singing is unique and worthy of keeping to some extent, regardless of whether it's intentional.

Also, the title of the album is supposed to translate from Latin as "sleepy land" or "land of sleep", right? If so, think it should probably be "terra somni". "Somnus" is a noun (rather than an adjective, in which case it would be "somna", as you have it), so it declines into "somni" for genitive (which would then give you "land of sleep"). You could also use "terra somniculosa" (the latter word being the feminine form of the adjective "somniculosus", i.e. sleepy) but that's somewhat unwieldy. Or you could just say it's a creative reworking of the noun "somnus" into an adjective since "somni" loses the feminine rhyme "terra" has with "somna". It doesn't really matter to me what you do, but there is a small chance another pedant will bother you about the title as is.

>>2188
Shit, thanks man.
I just put the subtitle there to fill up the dead space in the cover. It's a line from Third Plateau, and I felt it reflected the spirit of the project for me.
>>2190
Thanks!
I wouldn't say the vocal delivery is intentional or not, it's more naivete than anything, as I've spent the last two years practicing in my apartment alone with no feedback save for the couple of songs I've posted here. Amazingly, my neighbors never complained once.
I knew the title didn't really work in latin, but I did not know most of what you posted. The title just popped into my head when I started writing stuff back then, and it became something of a mantra that kept me on track, so keeping it seemed natural.

As an aside, the album was linked to on a reddit board where it was flogged soundly. I figure if redditors hate it, then I at least did something right.

Post edited on 6th Jul 2013, 6:30pm

I actually needed to zoom in to understand them, which is not a good sign; but after doing it, I liked what I saw. Just: the nipples of the saggy tits leveling up with the wristbands doesn't help neither of them; leaving the wrists uncovered would help us focusing in the tits.

OP here, thanks guys.

>>2163

I don't know. It is a weird fetish I have, I guess. Sometimes I start games totally innocently and then it goes into chaotic lewdness and perversion. I've tried to make games off and on for the past four years or so, and I've yet to finish one. Although I at least have a wealth of sprites and tile sets to use.

>>2164

That is a good point. Thanks.

The third one is really good. The other ones, not so much.

My advice is that you make them all short like that ginger maid. The talls ones look kind of... I don't know.

>>2170

The one with the red hair and blue outfit is from a game called Violated Heroine. I used some of the sprite sheets because they gave a really good checkerboard layout, which you can still partially see.

I know that I still have a long way to go before becoming "great" at it but I like to think that my artwork is still original.

>>2125
OP here
Thank you. I appreciate the critique. what parts were groan worthy?
>I'd like to overhaul some of the text.
That would be fine. You could write up what you want done and I could implement it. It would be cool If you could directly edit the script but I dont think you can open .rpy files without ren'py installed.

>P.S. I see what you did there.
Heh, I think I made it too obvious. I guess that's fine though. I know katawa did that in that pan shot of the classroom.

My skype and deviantart is heavensdeviant

Post edited on 3rd Apr 2013, 5:03pm

>>2126
Thanks
But I must say, I am not too sure of your intentions for the story.
Upon multiple playthroughs I've noticed the overall atmosphere has a 'hackneyed cliche trope'-vibe to it. Not sure if that was intentional.

I'll deconstruct some stuff here just to see if you like the elements presented.

1. Are the characters in Highschool? (unless you where going for that overused "I gotta study had so I can get into a good university"-trope)
I'd suggest changing it to a Community College or a similar type of place. That way Max would really be wasting away his life. On bad days he could just be skipping all his lectures and hanging out in the cafeteria/commons area.

2. Give Sasha a part-time job, volunteer work, or study group. Something to prove she is more ambitious than Max.
A part-time job would be ideal. Sasha could be working to pay off her educational debts while her father pays for Max and forces him to go.
This could cause Sasha to be a little bitter at times and resent Max for his 'free ride'.

2a. Later down the road Sasha tries to hook up Max with a shy co-worker or friend. This would create a triangle of conflict between Max, Sasha, and Lynn. This could even give Max internal conflict if him and said girl find some common ground + these interactions cause trouble in Lynn's 'Life Continuum'.

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>>2127
>1. Are the characters in Highschool? (unless you where going for that overused "I gotta study had so I can get into a good university"-trope)
>I'd suggest changing it to a Community College or a similar type of place. That way Max would really be wasting away his life. On bad days he could just be skipping all his lectures and hanging out in the cafeteria/commons area.


I was going with highschool but I don't have a strong reason to. Would it be weird that Sasha and Max would both be going to the same college? I think Sasha would be at a higher academic level. Well, her english grades are shit but she's very gifted in math. If they gave scholarship in that she would probably get it. that sort of thing just comes naturally to her.
>2.
>This could cause Sasha to be a little bitter at times and resent Max for his 'free ride'.
Only thing you've said I'm deadset against. The explanation why is a little lengthy but here I go. Sasha isn't dumb but she lacks a lot of common sense sometimes. the coffee thing was the first example I've set up to illustrate this. She doesn't pay attention to a lot of obvious things or just doesn't think about them. She gets confused and messes up a lot so max has always done things to help her and fix things when she messes up. many little things. When their parents had to leave they left max in charge even though sasha was older. She was never mad at them because she knew they were right to choose so. Only a little mad at herself for her own incompetence. Their whole life, Max was the smart, dependable one and Sasha needed looking after. So their mom passes away. Max gets depressed and has some existential crisis maybe. He's antisocial but that's normal for him. Sasha gets worried and starts trying to force her own ideals on him. "You were always there when I was hurt! You were always the one who fixed everything and took care of me! Well now your in pain and I should be able to do something!!! Why don't you let me help

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>>2128
Now it all makes sense. For the most part it sounds like you've got everything figured out (and good artwork to boot). Well, at least you know where to contact me.

I might still look into using Ren'Py.
I always wanted a to see a horror anime that was akin to the slasher genre of the 1980's. Maybe making a cheap and stylistic visual novel would be the best way of putting it out of my head and into perspective.
I've gotta find someway to kill my insomnia.